heart change
head change
love recieved
final decision
i've believed
and now what?
choices, so many
to be made
am i to change
or stay the same?
and how exactly
do i show
this change externally?
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cool cool...dont know if you edit your poems...i've been going back though and trying to make mine better and better...so take this and do what you please with it
ReplyDeletein the first stanza the rhythm seems to go
dum dum
dum dum
dum di dum (roughly) 1st 3 lines
my ear then *expected* to hear that again
ending on believed...hope this makes sense to someone other tan me lol
what im really tryin to say is experiment with adding another line b4 or after final decision so that it flows like
final decision
blah blah blah blah
i've believed
to *mirror* the first 3 lines
again take with a grain of salt lol
just giving my input
Confused and Indecisive yet Strong and Determined... You write Lovely Prose.
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